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Betrayed – Subroto Pant

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  • in Australia · Picture It Competition · Short Story
  • — 17 Oct, 2015 at 9:00 am

Betrayed

Subroto Pant

Sinnamon Park, Queensland

Australia

 

Picture It Competition Entry – Picture A

A

 

‘Statue.’

I freeze in mid-motion on hearing that effervescent voice. In an instant I am a child again.
Fingers wrap themselves around my neck, I’d know that touch anywhere.

‘I must be dreaming,’ the words stumble out.

I feel her breath on my neck, standing on the beautifully landscaped gardens with its lush green lawns.

‘I’ve missed you too,’ she whispers drawing closer, the fingers tracing an arc from my neck to my ears.

‘I had no choice,’ my fingers wrap around the dagger and I turn in a quick motion.

My blade cuts through the empty air.

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  1. A A Anderson says:
    October 19, 2015 at 3:49 pm

    Short but to the point. Great.

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    • subroto says:
      October 20, 2015 at 5:30 pm

      Thank you I am glad you liked it.

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  2. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields says:
    October 23, 2015 at 4:24 am

    Dear Subroto,

    There’s a lot layered between the lines of this one. Effective last line.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Subroto says:
      October 27, 2015 at 9:22 pm

      Thanks Rochelle,I enjoyed writing this one.

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